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I mostly write Triofic, although other relationships appear. I love constructive criticism, and of course praise, even months after posting.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room, The Broomshed > The Ladies Room, The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Hermione Granger, Harry Potter, Ginny Weasley, Ron Weasley
Genres: Erotica, PWP, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: FemSlash, Het, Masturbation, Rimming, Slash, Strong Sexual Content, Underage, Voyeurism, Weasleycest
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 43934 Read Count: 203376
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 5: Can I, Please?
Giggle, poor shy Ron!
Well, not so shy with Harry. I like that they're still them, like Ron feeling competitive about the orgasms.
Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 6: I Can Think Of Worse Reasons For People To Stare
I like Ginny's insights into Ron.
Sweet w/ Ron/Hermione getting used to being an item.
Again, they all seemed to have processed the unusualness of their foursome rather quickly.
Author's Response: I'm sure you're right and I was too impatient to get to the smutty parts (I'm bad about that when I write), but in my mind, H/R/Hr just fit together so well in my head in any context that Ginny - for me - is really the only unusualness in this situation, and I suppose given her string of boyfriends, I just kind of visualise her as the most sexually liberated of the four of them, not that there is really any canon evidence of that.
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 7: I Guess We Should Wait Then
Tease!
Author's Response: Well yes, but I hope it proved worth the wait.
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 8: Ok, So Maybe My Dad Did Strut
Strut, giggle!
Author's Response: Thanks! I rather liked that line myself.
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 9: He'd Always Heard That Payback Was Hell
Yum! (Yes, my reviews are getting shorter.)
Author's Response: S'okay ... glad you seemed to approve of this bit!
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 10: Let’s All Get Back Onto The Bed Then, Shall We?
The girls watching the boys, Ginny's head on Hermione's thigh, very hot.
Re the Weasleycest, it does seem odd that there's almost no guilt or discomfort, esp on Ginny's side.
Author's Response:
I know ... no excuse for it really. I found myself kind of wishing as I wrote this that JKR had opted to pair Harry with Luna or anyone who wasn't related to the Weasleys, but I didn't want to deviate from canon enough to use someone other than Ginny, so it is what it is.
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 11: Like A Kitten With A Saucer Of Milk
Ron's insecurity, thinking Harry is better at cunnilingus, very in character.
Very very hot. I like how you keep going back to "that need." (Yes, hence the title.)
Amusing typos:
"taught little bundle of nerves"--should be "taut," unless someone's teaching the bundle
"Harry would trust his tongue deep inside her pussy..." Ginny trusts it, too, but I think you mean "thrust."
Author's Response: Well, at least if I had to make careless mistakes, they were funny ones.
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 12: I Just, Umm, Really Like It
Funny, awkward, sexy lesson.
Author's Response: Thanks ... I kind of think that's how they'd be together if the situation were real.
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 13: Wet and Slippery is Not a Problem
Harry's shyness and sweetness, Hermione's lust and curiosity, mmm.
I'd been feeling like there wasn't enough H/H in this story, so this was very nice.
Author's Response: I really like those two together too, but I hated to overdo it since I had to dance around the delicate line of R/G.
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 14: Lava From a Volcano
Surprisingly sweet.
Ron/Harry may still be happening, but the present tense feels odd here:
"what they do when they’re alone" and "the memory of what her lover does to him"
Author's Response: Well, I guess I really was trying to convey that there is still intimacy between the boys (as there is with the girls).
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 15: More . . . P-pleeezze!
LOL, Mr. W and the Muggle shed.
LOL, Draco/Pansy.
And LOL, nosy Fat Lady.
Nice alternating between couples.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was just too impatient to focus on one couple at a time, I think.
Date: 10/07/2007 Title: Chapter 16: One Lucky Wizard
LOL, Ron as strategist.
LOL, Harry worrying about taking advantage of them.
Ron coming in the middle of a sentence, very sexy.
Typo: "relaxed pleasured"
Good story.
Author's Response:
Well, Harry ALWAYS worries about taking advantage of Ron & Hermione, doesn't he?
Fixed the typo, and I'm glad you liked the story!
After watching Ron's fears through the Horcrux, Harry decides it's time to tell Ron about his feelingsCategories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room
Characters: Harry Potter, Ron Weasley
Genres: PWP
Time Period: Voldemort's Second War
Warnings: Contains Spoilers for DH, Frottage, Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2512 Read Count: 2247
Date: 11/03/2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
A few spelling and punctuation mistakes (it should be "Disapparated," with one E), but a very well done story. Good characterization, good smut.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I appreciate it!
Categories: Hallowed Halls > Drabbles
Characters: Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley
Genres: Comedy, Drabble
Time Period: Voldemort's Second War
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 284 Read Count: 583
Date: 12/27/2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
This made me giggle, esp that you got it to end with "scar," which is more than JKR managed. :-J
Author's Response:
lol, that last line is probably my favorite ;D
