Penname: Ronsbabe [Contact] Real name: Jen
Member Since: 12/06/2006
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Obsessed with Harry Potter and more recently fanfiction. 

Particularly obsessed with RisiePookie and everything she writes.  Go check out her fics if you haven't already. 

Love R/Hr and TrioFic.  Got any suggestions for me? 


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Wake Me by risiepookie Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 173]
Summary: In the midst of the War, Hermione is kidnapped and held captive as Ron, Harry and Ginny search desperately for her. Hermione and Ron share a psychic connection, with which she tries to help him find her before it is too late.

A strong warning for this story, as it does contain the rape of a character and severe psychological trauma.

*This is the first story in my Awakenings Series*
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley
Genres: Angst, Darkfic, Drama, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Angst, Het, Rape, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 52346 Read Count: 16509
[Report This] Published: 08/23/2006 Updated: 08/23/2007
Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/24/2007 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Forcibly Removed

I've had this one in my favorites list for a while, but am only now getting the chance to read and review.  Very strong beginning.  I'm looking forward to the upcoming chapters.

Author's Response:

Well thanks for taking the time to both read and review!  I really appreciate you giving my fic a chance.  I hope you enjoy the upcoming chapters!

*fruit tart for you

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/24/2007 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - A Tentative Connection

Oh, I'm pissed at Harry for waking Ron up!  I hope that they will be able to save her, but I think it's going to take a while.  Good Chapter.  I really liked it.

Author's Response:

Hi there- thanks again for the reviews!  A rescue is coming, but it is a good while off.  I'm so glad the story is resonating with you. 

*root beer float for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/24/2007 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4- Hope Fades

Oh, god, that's horrible.  I am so worried for her.  The spell is cool though. 

Author's Response:

Oh, thanks so much for reviewing!  I know it's horrible- they'll all make it through eventually though!  :o) 

*chocolate dipped bananas for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/25/2007 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5- Bound

I really like the alternating points of view that you are using in this story.  And oh my god!  Poor Hermione and then poor Ron having to watch everything she was going through!!  I have the feeling it will be very hard for them to recover from this.

Author's Response:

Hi there again- thanks so much for all of your reviews.  I'm glad you are enjoying the alternating POVs- I was a bit worried that some readers would dislike that, so I'm happy it's working for you.  Yes, this will be really hard to recover from, and to be honest, this is not the worst yet- but they will get there eventually!

*rice pudding for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/25/2007 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Panic Attack

Oh, god, poor Hermione!  I can't even begin to describe how hard this chapter hit me or how much I can relate to her in this story.  Her voice comes out so strongly and so in character.  Really well done.  I can only hope that Ron will be able to get her out of there in the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Hi!  Oh, I'm sorry it hit you so hard and that you may have lived through something that makes you relate.  I certainly hope by the ending of this story I have written something that helps to give some catharsis to you.  Thank you for the comments about Hermione's voice and character, it's very appreciated.  Unfortunately, Hermione will not get out in the next chapter, but keep reading- change is coming!

*bread pudding for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/27/2007 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Panic Attack

I downloaded this chapter so I could read it again before the next chapter.  I'm just speechless.  Wow.  Even on the second read-through, I'm amazed at all of the smaller details you've managed to get in here that are so Hermione!  Beautiful!

Author's Response:

Wow, I feel so complimented by your comment of saving it to read a second time.  Thanks for taking the time to let me know your thoughts again!!  ::hugs::

*Espresso Chip ice cream for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/02/2007 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Unveiled

Wow...  just...  Wow!  Every chapter is more powerful than the next.  I can't leave a proper review just yet.  I need to let it all set in.  More soon, once I pick my jaw up off the ground.

Author's Response:

Hi there again!  Thank you so much for your words- they have made so many smiles come to my face!  I really appreciate you taking the time to read and to think about it, and then to review.  It's amazing to me to have touched a reader enough to do that.  Thanks again so much!

*Hershey's dark chocolate kisses for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/02/2007 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Unveiled

I'm going back an re-reading this chapter in smaller sections.  My first comment is about the relationship between Ron and Ginny.  So many times I think authors focus on the competition and arguing that can happen between them.  However, they were each other's first friends and entire world until Ron left for Hogwarts. 

I always rather thought they would have a playful relationship.  You have taken that idea and brought some lightness to an otherwise very difficult chapter.  The interactions feel so genuine and so familiar, like what a real brother and sister would do.  In fact, it reminded me of something I would do with my brother. 

And then having Harry just completely not understand their joke?  I thought that was priceless.  Someone who does not have siblings cannot possibly understand the odd and yet wonderful experience of sharing that kind of bond with someone.  Even if Harry does see Ron as a sibling, it's not the same. 

I loved this part.  Each time you show us Ginny, you show how respectable and necessary her character is.  I appreciate that, because there are so many Ginny-haters out there.  Well done!



Author's Response:

Gosh, can I just say how incredibly flattered and moved I am for you going through the chapter and giving such a thorough review!!!  Truly, your reviews have been such an amazing boost in feeling like my fic is making some kind of impact!

As far as the Ron/Ginny sibling relationship, I too think so many authors focus on the competitive and argumentative side of their relationship.  While there definitely is that part of their dynamic, I think there is a lot more there waiting to me explored. 

I actually don't have brothers, but I do have two sisters.  Quite of bit of the sibling dynamic I am basing off of the feelings I have when with my sisters. 

I am so glad that you saw the interactions and dynamics as genuine!  And, I agree- to a certain extent, someone who does not have siblings cannot fully understand what it is like to grow up with that relationship.  I think that people can create similar relationships in their lives, so that they are like siblings, but it is a bit different (though no less special!). 

Also, I'm very glad that my Ginny characterization is working for you, especially coming from someone who likes her.  Thanks for such a detailed review!  It made my day!

*chocolate covered strawberries for you* 

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/02/2007 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Unveiled

The memory scene was handled so well.  Honestly, all of the scenes with the rape have been handled so well.  I usually have such a hard time reading them.  Don't get me wrong- I still had a hard time reading it.  However I thought you handled it with sensitivity and you weren't doing it for the shock value. 

I loved how you were giving both the actuality of what was happening, Ron's feelings, and Harry and Ginny's reactions.  That was wonderful.

Also, you gave us a bit of a missing moment!  The chapter that ended after the rape with Hermione passing out and Ron going back to the Ministry.  We didn't know what happened after that yet.  I thought it was really nice to see Harry comforting Ron in such a way.  Harry and Ron have been best friends for so long, it makes sense that Harry would feel comfortable to hold Ron in his time of need.  I thought your description of it was wonderful. 

I can't begin to tell you how much I loved this chapter.  I only hope these reviews give you some small idea. 



Author's Response:

Wow, another fantastic review!  I feel so spoiled by you and all of your comments!  :o)

I'm so happy to hear that the rape scene wasn't too awful for you to read.  I have said this before, but I was very worried about how it would come off in the storyline.  There was a lot happening in the penseive scene, and it's nice to hear you've received it so well! 

Yes, there was a small bit of a previously missing scene.  I feel like there is so much rich material in the Ron/Harry friendship and that they really are soulmates, in a non-romantic way- they are best friends and brothers.  I wanted to give a glimpse of the love that is shared between them as friends.  I'm so glad that you enjoyed it!

Truly, your reviews are so incredibly wonderful!!!  I am so thankful and grateful for each of them!

*hot fudge sundae for you* 

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/02/2007 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Unveiled

The section after going through the pensive memory was fantastic!  Having both Ginny and Harry holding Ron and letting him know that he wasn't alone was such a nice moment between the three of them.  They all so badly needed to cry and morn for the loss of their friend, even if Hermione isn't dead.  She's not dead, right?  Right?? 

I like that you show Ron as incredibly strong, but willing to be vulnerable around them.  I have the feeling that he doesn't let that side of him out in front of anybody else.  And really, it makes sense that he would get this way about Hermione, because they are only half of themselves without each other.  Well, I personally believe that the four of them (the trio plus Ginny) would not be whole without each other.  I think you manage to show that so well. 

Again, you show us the nice part of a sibling relationship.  A little playful, definitely knowing each otehr's strengths, and being proud of each other.  You seem to like Ginny, because you give her a lot of credit and show her to be incredibly strong.  She has a fire all her own and you show that with the words you use to describe her. 

*happy dance*  I'm so glad I finally decided to complete the reading of this fic.  I never would have know what I would have missed.  Wow!



Author's Response:

Wow, another one!! 

I'm so glad you enjoyed the section after the memory.  This is exactly what I was talking about with the Harry/Ron and Ron/Ginny relationships.  I think there is so much rich material there to be explored.  I love the idea that they would envelope him in their love, especially when Hermione is gone.  And, I'm sure you already know, Hermione is not dead.  But, she is going through a hell of a time! 

I think the Quad (as I call them) ends up in most of my fics, because they are all so essential to each other in my mind.  It's nice to meet someone who feels the same way! 

Thanks again for the great review!  *butter pecan ice cream for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/02/2007 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Unveiled

I almost died when I read this: 

//My hands skimmed up her arm, feeling the small semi-circle scar near her elbow.  Still there, I thought.  They traced up to her delicate shoulders, her graceful neck, the dips in her clavicle.  My fingertips traced the soft line of her jaw, so soft, and cupped her cheek.  Her cheek used to be fuller, but this is her.  I would know her face anywhere, even with my eyes closed. 

 

I felt the bridge of her nose, her eyelashes, her every feature.  Merlin, I wish this was real.  This must be a dream come true, because I’m finally touching her again.  I moved my hand to touch the last place I knew as well as the back of my own hand.  I moved my thumb over her mouth, to caress her lower lip.  I wish I knew what it would feel like to brush it with my lips instead of my thumb.  //

Could that be any more wonderful?  He knows her so well, without ever having had her, but he knows the lines of her face and he knows her little elbow scar.  I can really see Ron knowing all of that, even if he can seem clueless sometimes.  Being such a brilliant chess player, he must know more than he lets on.  Those lines were beautiful.  And then you give us this:

//After gathering my courage, I leaned forward and dared to brush my lips gently onto hers.  Soft, but chapped.  My eyes had closed, but I opened them, before pulling back.  I caught a glimpse of peace on Hermione’s face and I was relieved to know I had not completely scared her off by showing my affection for her.  I leaned my forehead against hers and breathed her in.//

Let me just say it for everyone:  SQUEE!!!!!!!!!  This was incredible.  I don't know why, but this hit me so hard, for them to have their first kiss in the midst of all of this.  I know the first REAL kiss will be coming sooner or later and it will be fantastic, but this one was just so sweet and emotional. 

My heart nearly broke when he wasn't able to apparate out of there with her.  I seriously nearly started to cry.  It was such a horrible moment. 

Again you gave us some insight into Ron's feelings about Ginny.  He thinks she's brilliant and he's giving her the credit for fixing everything.  He even tells Hermione that Ginny is brilliant.  I think that's fantastic. 

And then Hermione realized she would have to stay?  Oh, dear, I could have absolutely died when I read this.  Can I just say heartbroken?  Poor Ron, being given such a choice and having to live with it.  He's going to feel so guilty later, I just know it. 

There is so much material here.  Every passage is so rich and has so many emotions and implications.  I don't know how you are going to possibly resolve all of it.  I'm looking forward to finding out though.

 



Author's Response:

Seriously, I am blushing!!!  I feel so incredibly complimented from your comment.  Being able to see the section the way that you saw it, it's incredibly moving to have your thoughts. 

And, YAY!!!  I know, after so many chapter of this hell, I finally gave in to a moment of closeness and intimacy between Ron and Hermione.  There is more to come on that front, but it's going to be slow moving.  With the nature of the trauma they are all going through, they will need to move slowly. 

Another comment about the sibling relationship!  I'm so glad that dimension is working for you- I haven't gotten much feedback about that, so thank you for your thoughts and words!  :o)

*yummy peppermint stick for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/02/2007 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Unveiled

I had goosebumps and chills runs through my body as I read this:

//She pulled back from me and kissed my cheek.  Merlin help me, I can’t resist her.  Without thought or hesitation, I turned my head and caught her lips in a soft, simple kiss, but oh.  It was a kiss I had waited for, a kiss I had longed for.  It was a symbol of something I had turned away and had always regretted.  I’ll never forget this moment.  I let my lips linger on hers, all the while knowing now was not the time to be thinking of how much I needed to have her, how much she needed to be mine.  I pulled back and kissed her forehead, blessing the beautiful courage which lay within the depths of her mind.// 

That kiss was infinitely better than the first!  I am waiting in anticipation for a real one becuase if you can make me feel this way with just a simple kiss, imagine how I will feel with a real one?  Wow.  It's going to be amazing. 

More great interactions with Ginny.  I loved how she hugged him and then smacked him around when he got back.  That was funny and very in character.  It was also very reminiscent of something Molly would do. 

His faith in her in so nice:  //I felt Ginny’s legs sag against me, before she expelled a huge puff of air.  Looking down into her petite face, I saw both her smile and her tears.  “Hush.  It’s going to be okay.  You’re going to save the day.”// 

How can you say so much with so few words about their relationship? 

And Ron confiding in her about the kiss and her hesitance about that decision was surprising.  I wasn't sure what to think about that little moment.  I do see what she means though, it was possibly not the best time to try something like that.  However because those were some of my favorite moments in the chapter, I will have to forgive Ron for his poor timing.  :)

 



Author's Response:

Talk about goosepimples!  I am getting them with each successive review that I am receiving from you!!!  Again, words cannot begin to express my gratitude at hearing your thoughts and opinions.  ::huge hugs to you::

I'm so glad the kisses are impacting you in such a way- it's funny how such a simple thing can make such a difference in an otherwise truly horrific chapter, yeah?

Yes, there is more development on the Ron/Ginny relationship.  That will continue throughout the rest of the fic.  It may seem surprising how she reacted to Ron's revelation, but something coming up in the next chapter should explain her reaction.  She's looking out for him, because she doesn't want him to blow it majorly.  However, I think most people will forgive his bad timing!

Thanks again for everything!  *creme brulee for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/02/2007 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Unveiled

Ron's fantasy was so sweet, but I just KNOW that it's not going to be that easy for them.  How could it possibly be that easy with everything they've just gone through? 

There is somehting so organic and just sexy about this line, I read it over and over again:

//She’ll get so used to sleeping in my arms that it will be uncomfortable for either of us to try to sleep alone ever again.  She’ll reach out for me in her sleep, and pull me in closer to her.  I won’t be able to get much closer though, because I’ll be spooned against her body all night long.  I’ll be able to smell the vanilla in her hair.  I’ll practically be able to taste the salt on her skin. //

What an incredible thought for Ron to have.  I think Ron has a hard time seeing how Hermione could possibly want to be with him, without needing a reason.  Ron thinks the way he will get her is if she is needing his comfort.  This is so in character.  Ron does not believe he is worthy of her and you are zeroing in on that. 

I really hope Hermione isn't pregnant.  Look at this line!!!: 

//I’ll tell her about my dreams of a home, living next door to Ginny and Harry, kissing her pregnant belly, kids running in the backyard, so much love to go around that we won’t know what to do with ourselves.//

She can't be pregnant, because that line needs to happen.  You need to make that happen for them, somehow.  Pretty, pretty please? 

I know that his fantasies are way too positive, but do you think you will be giving us something of a happy ending?  I know it can't be too happy, because this is a very serious fic.  But, a little bit happier would be much appreciated.  I'm loving every word of this. 



Author's Response:

Yes, you're right- it will not be that easy for them.  It couldn't possibly be that simple after the ordeal that they have lived through.  Sure, happy endings are not impossible, but so soon after the trauma, it's highly unlikely. 

I agree about Ron feeling like Hermione needs a reason to be with him- at least at the earlier stages of development of a relationship.  He doesn't see how she could possibly choose someone like him (though we all can see why!!), but he thinks that might be the way for him to have her- to be her support. 

I've said this before to other people, but my answer about the happy ending is a bit complex.  There will and won't be a happy ending.  There will be, in th sense that there will be hope and light for the future.  However, it won't be fluffy and very happy, because that wouldn't be true to the rest of the fic or the situation.  This is only the first in the series that I have planned, so there is a lot of room for happiness over the story arc.  They will be happy enough at the end of the fic, but more happiness to come in the follow-up piece. 

Thanks again for continuing to review!  It's been so amazing for me to get your reviews!  :o)

*tiramisu for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/02/2007 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Unveiled

This is my last review for this chapter.  I cannot wait to go onto the next chapter and see what you've got for us.

This last section with Ginny really threw me for a loop!!  Again you write the sibling dynamic so well.  I'm guessing that you have siblings.  Am I right?  I don't see how someone who doesn't have siblings can so accurately gett all of the nuances into so few lines of dialogue. 

This is the part that absolutely killed me though:

//“Just be careful, Ron.  I know how badly you want this- have wanted this for so long.  I just want you to go slow, otherwise everything could be ruined, yeah?  Remember, you’re the one who rejected her and broke her heart years ago.  This might not be as easy as you want to think.  I’m trying to look out for you.”

 

“I know.  I’ll try to make sure that nothing happens that I won’t be able to take back- not like the last time.  Thanks, Ginny.”  //

WHAT, WHAT, WHAT??????????  Did you say that he rejected her in an earlier chapter and I missed it?  I think I need to go back and investigate that.  If that was new, I think that was a brilliant way to give us a hint about why they haven't yet started up a relationship and why Hermione ended up with someone else. 

I LOVE the dynamic when Harry comes in and you see the playfulness between Harry and Ginny, as well as with Ron.  I love how you have Ginny as an established part of their lives, not just Ron's sister and Harry's girlfriend.  She definitely feels like an equal, a family member, and a friend, which is how I think JKR means her to be- at least eventually. 

To sum up for this chapter, I am blown away.  I would say I'm speechless, but after 5 or 6 reviews of the same chapter (I've now lost count), it's clear that I'm not speechless at all.  I am amazed by your talent and your ability to write Ron so well, while getting Ginny, Hermione, and Harry so in character.  Seriously, well done!  I do hope that Ron's going to rescue her in the next chapter.  I am crossing my fingers and hoping for the best.   



Author's Response:

Wow, I'm feeling so completely overwhelmed by all of the wonderful reviews you have posted for me.  Truly, you have touched me so deeply by taking the time to go through each section like this.  I can't begin to tell you what it has done to my heart.  Thank you!!!!!

Okay, you will see in the next chapter what Ginny was referring to.  There is a bit of R/Hr backstory that hasn't been told (well, actually quite a bit, but some key things really), but a few things unfold in the next chapter in that regard.  So, yes, this was new information, and it was a hint at answers to come.  :o)

I love how this is your "last review for the chapter"- again, I can't say what all of this has meant to me!  I am so glad that you are resonating with the storyline, with my characterizations, and my writing style in general.  These have all been things I have worried about, so thank you for giving me some feedback about each of those dimensions. 

Thanks so much for everything!  *caramel apple for you*

Reviewer: Ronsbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/04/2007 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Slipping Further Away

I think I'm going to have to do what I did with the last chapter and leave several reviews, because WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW!

You have completely ripped my heart out and I've been crying as I read this and yet, oddly, I can't wait to go on and read the next chapter. 

That's how I can tell how well this story is being written.  You are pulling my heart out of my chest, but I still want to read and I'm sad that the next chapter is the last chapter posted.  I'm afraid I'll start to go through withdrawal. 

More reviews to come, but overall let me just say that this is definitely the best chapter by far.  I would venture to say this is the worst best chapter I have ever read in fanfiction.  I'm so amazed. 



Author's Response:

Wow, again, thank you so much for all of your fantastic reviews!!  I'm amazed, shocked, and beyond pleased to receive all of them. 

Gosh, hearing you say that you were crying throughout the chapter was both good and hard to hear.  I'm sorry it was clearly so painful to read through, but that means that the agony I wanted to come across did. 

The imagery of your review is quite vivid: "ripped my heart out" and "pulling my heart out of my chest" and it's quite clear to me exactly what my fic is doing to you.

I am starting to work on the next chapter, but it is a ways off...  I'm working as fast as I can!!  Thanks again for everything!

*butterscotch pudding for you*