Penname: acoustics1220 [Contact] Real name: melissa
Member Since: 12/05/2006
Membership status: Member
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I am obsessed with the character Hermione Granger.  I ship HHr usually, but lately, I've been quite interested in SS/HG.  Odd, but true - I've found some brilliant writers that have written very believable SS/HG fics.  Anyway, I'm in the vicinity to find good reading material.  Hopefully my search will prove successful here.

 My FA and PK Screen name are the same. 

my lj: http://acoustics1220.livejournal.com


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A Mistake by inell Rated: FG13 - Family Guidance13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Hermione makes a mistake
Categories: Remains of the Day > Leaving Feast
Characters: Hermione Granger, Charlie Weasley
Genres: Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1247 Read Count: 1655
[Report This] Published: 01/12/2006 Updated: 01/12/2006
Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/08/2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very cool.  I really liked how you put all the elements together.  And that you were able to put in all the things aqua_chuu wanted.  The detail and metaphor to ice was very cool.  I thought it added a nice 'coolant' for something so hot and flaring as Charlie and Hermione's coming together.

That was neat.  Thanks for sharing!

Wake Me by risiepookie Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 173]
Summary: In the midst of the War, Hermione is kidnapped and held captive as Ron, Harry and Ginny search desperately for her. Hermione and Ron share a psychic connection, with which she tries to help him find her before it is too late.

A strong warning for this story, as it does contain the rape of a character and severe psychological trauma.

*This is the first story in my Awakenings Series*
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley
Genres: Angst, Darkfic, Drama, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Angst, Het, Rape, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 52346 Read Count: 16356
[Report This] Published: 08/23/2006 Updated: 08/23/2007
Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 12/22/2006 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1- Forcibly Taken

ohhhh - this starts off pretty intense!  You like Ron.  It's his POV again.  It's interesting to see how you write him, I really like the internal dialogue - it shows how he tries to talk himself into being logical and resisting the urge to just break down and cry for his mama. 

I liked seeing Harry turn into Auror Harry, barking orders, giving Ron directions in what he needs to do.  That's exactly what Ron needed, a hand to steer him in the right direction. 

Next chapter - here I come!

 m



Author's Response:

Hey Melissa-

I'm so glad you made it over to this fic!  I know R/Hr is totally not your thing, so I can't thank you enough for giving another one of my fics a chance.  I also loved the part with Harry taking charge- Ron will have his moment in the sun, but I think Harry needed to give him that first push.  Thanks for reading and reviewing: I hope you continue to enjoy it.

*chocolate-covered strawberries for you*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 12/22/2006 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Forcibly Removed

Definitely love the POV change.  I'm very big on Hermione writers.  I really liked the factual feel of this chapter.  Hermione always has a point and she always just says things as they are. 

 I liked how you went into that flashback of Ron and Hermione arguing about wards around her office.  Imagine that - <insert foot in mouth Hermione!>.

 Very interesting how you described Hermione reaching out to Ron in her mind.  The fuzziness, the realization that she had his attention for an instant, and then he just faded away. Very cool.

m



Author's Response:

Hi Melissa-  I couldn't agree with you more about people writing from Hermione's POV.  I absolutely LOVE IT when authors do that.  As you continue you read, you'll see how the spell she uses morphs and becomes more sophisticated- she's just got to figure it out first.  The progression is some of my favorite stuff, as far as continuity is concerned, throughout the first several chapters. 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

*yummy peppermint patties for you*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 12/22/2006 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - A Tentative Connection

Cool.  I liked the switch (again).  I felt real fear for Hermione.  Loved it that finally Hermione was able to get Ron to pay attention and started rambling about her surroundings and her captors.  I'm a little scared to see what will happen in the next chapter though, the Death Eaters were approaching when Ron woke up and cut off their link.

 *bites fingernails*

m



Author's Response:

Hi Melissa-

you are right to be concerned, things do get more dark as the fic progresses ::Risie winces::  I wish I could say the next chapter is the worst, but that would be a lie.  I am currently writing chapter 8 and that is going to be the darkest.  But, things will look up shortly.  At least there are some lighter moments to balance out the heaviness.

*hugs and angel food cake for you*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 12/22/2006 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4- Hope Fades

ugh...puppet.  Scary.  What will happen next?  Hmmm, awesome that we saw how Hermione reacted after being able to communicate with Ron.  Very cool.  I love the descriptions - how she yelled for him, imagined him in her mind.  Good stuff.

 Still scared of the pet name though.

 m



Author's Response:

Heya Melissa-

yes, puppet, I agree: very scary.  Sorry, but I had to make it feel real, you know?  I hope the next chapter doesn't scare you too much- I know that's the one that might put some people off.  I can promise you that if you make it through that, it looks up a bit, then gets dark again, but it will look up with the next posted chapter (8). 

Again, I cannot tell you how complimented I feel for your reading this fic, especially since R/Hr is not your thing.  I feel very honoured, so thank you very much.

*peanut-butter cookies with chocolate chips for you*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 12/27/2006 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5- Bound

Now I see why you emailed me.  Indeed, this one turned quite dark and evil. 

 I've come across this particular situation with victims and it's so sad to see the shame they feel for something that was out of their control.  

*

 It's really interesting to see that not only can Ron see, feel, and hear Hermione while asleep, but while awake as well.  That must be particularly draining for Hermione.  Too bad she wasn't able to tell Ron the proper incantation so he could do it too.

 Dang.  Well I'm off to the next chapter.  Chapter...6? 

Poor Hermione - this is doubly bad for her because she has a natural fear of shame and guilt, and it's been doubled here because of what the Death Eater did to her. 

*hopes for the best*

m



Author's Response:

Hey my dear M-

Yes, you definitely see why I emailed you: it's so dark and scary.  Frankly, I had a hard time stomaching it, and I wrote it! 

This situation for the affected women can be so incredibly shaming and horrible.  It truly is a taboo topic about rape survivors, but it is not as rare as it might seem.  Unfortunately, not enough people talk about it and I thought I could shed some light on it.  Okay ::Risie steps off her soapbox::  I'm done with that for the moment!

Thanks for sticking with it, despite how dark it's getting.

*caramel apple for you* 

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 12/29/2006 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Panic Attack

Wow.  This has a little light at the end of the chapter.  There's...dare I say it?  HOPE!!!

 Well, I'm sure that little ray of light is just decieving us.  I'm almost POSITIVE of that. 

 I liked how Ron was so torn up about wondering if Hermione was real or not.  She sure kept away from him for a long time!  WHOA - 3 weeks.  I would feel so frantic if I lost complete contact in that situation.

 good chapter.

m



Author's Response:

Heya-

the light is indeed deceiving, though it's not too far off...  there will be more yuckiness for the next couple of chapters, but then- some more light!  yay!

poor Ron- she really is killing him a minute at a time, despite her best intentions to keep him away from the horror of the torture.

Thanks for reviewing again, can't wait to see what you think of the next chapter!

*peanut butter cookies for you*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 01/12/2007 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Unveiled

GEEZ!  You had to cut it off RIGHT THERE?!

 Of course you did, cuz that's how writer's work, innit?

 Two things that I really liked - the detailed description of having the memory pulled out of Ron's temple.  I really liked how you described it, like somebody drilled a small hole and poured cold liquid into it.  That's a little scary actually, lol.

The other thing I like - the interactions of Ginny and Harry.  Especially when Harry 'makes an appearance' with his sarcastic little quips and then Ginny scolding him when Ron was complimenting her.  Very cute.

I hope everything works out!!!  Come on Ron - get Hermione out of there!

m



Author's Response:

Hi Melissa!  Of course I cut it off right there- you talk to me often enough to know how evil I am when it comes to stuff like this.  =80) 

Much as this fic is about Hermione and Ron, I truly enjoy the scenes with Harry and Ginny- they are, after all, my second loves. 

Everything is going to work out... eventually... sooner or later... maybe in the follow-up fic.  hehe.  I know, THAT makes me truly evil, huh?  :shrugs::  Well, at least the next chapter will be up soon.  It's with my fantastic beta (Thevina), so whenever we get through the editing process, it will be up.

*yummy Korean food for you (because you've been craving it a lot lately)*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 01/24/2007 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Slipping Further Away

*squee!!!*

I'm glad to see an update!  I knew it was coming soon but didn't know exactly. 

This was a really interesting chapter.  I loved the memories you brought into the mix.  Poor Hermione.  That first memory of telling him how she felt, and then after the rejection, the brave face she put on.  Poor girl.

 And then the second memory!  I was surprised, yet not, by Hermione telling him it was just a phase he was going through.  That situation is just so hard to understand and yet I know why she's doing that. 

UGH!  That abductor is such a jerk!  He's a scumbag and all the foul named things around!  I can't wait to see how Hermione will come to- in the next chapter, and if/what that head collision did/will do to her mind, memory, and recollections. 

 *gets excited*

m



Author's Response:

Hi Melissa!  ::hugs::

 I wasn’t exactly sure when the chapter was going to be up otherwise I would have told you when we talked.  :o)  I’m SO glad you enjoyed it, especially because you’re such a Hermione-lover and I really did some horrible things to her this chapter.  ::risie has the good graces to look sorry for doing so:: 

Actually, the two memories were the parts I enjoyed writing about the most.  Even though they were painful memories, and so raw in their emotion, that’s really the story- how their connection and their history snowball. 

I’m actually really excited for the next chapter too!  I just started writing it, but it’s shaping up pretty well.  Thanks for your continuing support (both here at TQP and in real life) of the fic and my writing in general.  I truly appreciate your love and encouragement. 

*yummy caramel flan with whipped cream for you, my dear*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/13/2007 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - Barely Breathing

Uh. Wow.

 That's left me slightly gobsmacked right there. The rescue was amazing, very detailed and specific, I could picture everything as Ron was running out with Hermione.  That sure was scary how Ron found her, and then the way she wouldn't respond - made my heart go *bump*

Amazing writing as usual. So very descriptive, intense, and amazing. All while I was reading this, the intensity really pulled me in. It was interesting the whole scene with Ron in the hospital bed with Hermione. I thought it was odd, but a pretty good framework to then have Hermione come awake so scarily.

 Oh, the panic attack - Ron. That poor guy, *scary* I've had a few of those symptoms before and it's not a good feeling at all. Amazing how you described all of it, the way Ron couldn't hear anything, couldn't focus, felt his chest tightening on him, :::phew:::

Made me breathe really deeply when I was reading through that section. Well done.

Really well done. :::big hugs::: Thanks for this new chapter. Sorry I didn't get to it sooner.



Author's Response:

Hi M!  ::hugs you tightly:: 

I told you this latest chapter would definitely leave you speechless, because of where I left it!  I'm so glad that I delivered on that promise to you. 

I'm so happy that you enjoyed the chapter, especially with the TONS of stuff going on, in so many different areas.  I'm also very glad that the descriptiveness worked for you.  Thevina and I worked hard to make sure that there was enough, but not too much to bog down the pace.  :o)

Yes, I think there are a lot of us who are familiar with panic attacks.  Anyone who has had one can tell you exactly what it's like, and what it feels like to live through one.  I think it's fairly easy to logically understand it, but to live through one is so completely different.  Definitely scary.  ::nods::

Thanks so much for my lovely review, my dear!  It always makes me so happy to hear what you've felt about each chapter, so thanks for giving me your thoughts!

*rasperry sorbet for you*

If a Man Answers by risiepookie Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 218]
Summary: When Ron comes back after two years, he dreads another man answering Hermione's door in the middle of the night. He certainly didn't expect the other man to be Harry. Jealousy, sex, betrayal, confusion, and heartache ensue.  Unfortunately, all is not as it should be and Ron must survive the unexpected consequences of his return, including broken relationships and promises.

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Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley
Genres: Angst, Drama, Erotica, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Angst, Contains Spoilers for DH, Het, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 40051 Read Count: 29769
[Report This] Published: 08/27/2006 Updated: 04/21/2008
Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstar
Date: 12/05/2006 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Finally Home

I like your writing.  You are a good storyteller.  I really liked reading in Ron's POV.  It was very insightful, and since Ron is older - I feel he's matured a great deal.  Hopefully this is the case because really, it would be quite interesting to see how Ron will react for what's in the future.

Good chapter.

 

-m



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  I actually love to write from Ron's POV, because I think there is a lot going on behind the scenes that doesn't always get explored. 

Thanks so much for reading, I truly appreciate the review!

*ginger snaps for you*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 12/05/2006 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Revelations

I really liked the flashbacks.  They added a great deal of sentimental value to the experience of now.  I have to admit this story is maybe the 4th RHr story I've followed with a bit of enthusiasm.  The first chapter was very intriguing and had great promise.  Here, we can see you can write situations and sentiment really well. 

The cliffhanger is killer.  Way to get the readers to come back.

-m



Author's Response:

Hi Melissa-

I feel so honoured to be one of those four stories!  I'm glad you're sticking with it, especially since I see that you're typically H/Hr and this is not that in a traditional sense. 

Actually, the flashbacks were my favorite part of this chapter, so I'm glad you enjoyed them as well!

Thank you so much for your compliments, your review, and for reading!'

*chocolate frog for you*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 12/05/2006 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Frozen

I liked the repetitiveness at the beginning of the chapter.  It emphasized Ron's internal struggle to accept what Hermione had admitted.  The tear falling down her cheek, and her difficulty breathing was great imagery for me.  I really love it when a writer utilizes details to create distinct images.  I also have to mention that I really like the format you write in.  The spaces between so few lines.  They help to keep a reader focused on certain things.  I really like your word usage.  Often I come across fics that are good, but lack a wide variety of vocabulary - often reflecting the way they personally converse with others.  Here, in this chapter - I can really see the preciseness of each character's personality. 

Ron's anger is apparent and his personality blossoms out, his temper rising, his fierce want to hurt her, to lash out, to send a blow at her.

 And then there's Hermione, stubborn, surprising us with her strength.  She's a lion under that meek, quiet exterior.  Those that are close to her know what her personality and drive is.

Good stuff.

 -m



Author's Response:

Hi Melissa-

Wow!  Again, such a lovely review!  I'm actually a little speechless at how many compliments you managed to get into your review.  ::Risie blushes furiously::  Thank you so much! 

I am almost fanatical in my enjoyment of Hermione's character and how much is untapped, just ready for us to explore.  She certainly is a thrill for me to write- it's nice to hear from someone else who clearly respects her so deeply as well. 

*a piece of pumpkin pie with cinnamon whipped cream on top for you*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 12/05/2006 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - Hearing Without Understanding

^_^

 I liked the argument between Harry and Hermione.  The 'Harry come here, I need you!' argument was great and very much to the point.  Hermione always makes a point.

So very true.

 Amazing that Harry was arguing for Ron like that.  Jeez.  So obviously Ron is not thinking trio activity at all here, he is thinking strictly two people in a relationship.  I really thought that Ron had matured to phenomenal levels when he confessed to himself that he would give up his happiness of being with Hermione if she would be happier with Harry.

 And then the dream was like - WHOA!  He's actually gonna get to keep the girl!

Lol.  The way Ron acted after getting the jinx taken off was not as surprising, seeing how Ron explained the whole relationship and their problems in the first chapter.  His way of approaching the matter was quite tactful and precise - what's going to make him explode next though, I wonder. =)

Can't wait for the next update.

-m 



Author's Response:

Hello Melissa-

I must thank you again for leaving such a detailed and wonderful review!  It brings such a smile to me face just reading through it. 

I completely agree- Hermione always makes a point.  It just seems right that she does, you know? 

Our dear Ron is maturing before our very eyes: he's taking in his situation, processing it, and deciding what will ultimately be the best reaction.  No promises that it will always be smooth for him though. 

As for the dream, I know that was a bit evil!  I felt like I could give a bit of smut for everyone who was sticking with me through all of the exposition and angst. 

I'm just now starting to work on the next chapter.  My other current story (Wake Me) is taking up a lot of my time right now.  I'm trying to even out the time a bit. 

Again, thank you so much for all of your reviews.  I am honestly floored by you taking the time to write such wonderful things about each chapter so far!  big hugs!

*yummy strawberry mousse for you*

Reviewer: acoustics1220 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 01/05/2007 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Memories of a Lifetime Ago

hahahah!  That's funny the way it ended.  Absolutely perfect Mrs. Weasley, the urgency, the shrillness - her words! 

 Good chapter!  I really enjoy your details.  They're very specific and it helps to paint the whole picture, it all adds up in the emotion of the story.  The way Ron describes his pain worsening and lessening, all at the same time.  And the way you described both their tears.

 Very nice work.  Can't wait to see the next chapter. 

*sidenote question - is Ron still naked?  Or did he have a chance to clothe himself in the previous chapter?

 

*hugs*

m



Author's Response:

Hi Melissa-

you know, I get an absolute kick out of the fact that you are following this fic!  Especially since it continues along R/Hr lines- are you holding out hope for Harry? hehe. 

Molly showing up at the end was my attempt to get the plot moving beyond this first night- isn't she great?  As for Ron being naked...  ::smirks::  I haven't seen any clothes yet!

Thanks for continuing to read and review!  ::hugs::

*yummy horchata for you (because I know it's your favorite)*