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A Walk in the World by vanseedee Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]
Summary: In a perfect world, no one gets sick, you keep the girl, and wait for your best mate to come home. In Seamus's world, things work differently.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room
Characters: Dean Thomas, Lavender Brown, Seamus Finnigan
Genres: Romance
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: Contains Spoilers for DH, Het, Slash
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 18264 Read Count: 805
[Report This] Published: 04/20/2009 Updated: 04/20/2009
Reviewer: Bluestocking Suffragette Signed
Date: 04/30/2009 Title: Chapter 1: A Walk in the World

Amazing. Stunning. Incredible. And with illos, yet!

I'm really impressed with your portrait of Seamus as he grows up and out of the war that's kept him a child a little too long. You voice him beautifully and keep him true so to himself the portrayal rings like good crystal. I felt his confusion and eventually his pain, and was very impressed at the clarity you gave him to heal himself.

One of your other reviewers suggested a companion piece from Dean's POV. If I were in your place (which, of course, I'm not) I wouldn't do it. Dean needs to be the mysterious one, the silent one,  the almost-unreachable goal. Every love story needs a moment where the loved one seems unobtainable: you've stretched that moment to bind the whole fic together. Don't voice him. He should never lose his mystery.

Or his sense of humor. "There better be flowers." It would be a good title for the fic, actually.

Overall, it reminds me of a song I heard on the radio today: "It's a love story, baby, just say yes." Once they're able to say yes to one another, Dean and Seamus have all they need.



Author's Response:

Thank you for your kind words, I'm very glad that you liked the story and took the time for letting me know what you thought. And no, I'm not planning to write a companion piece or a sequel for several reasons. This story has been told and is definitely finished.

 

Your suggestion for a title is interesting. There is one reason, though, why it wouldn't work for me. The story isn't a humorous piece, and even though I've included some banter and lighter moments, the core of the story is a journey - literally and figuratively. That's why I chose a title that expresses that. Thank you for making me think about it, though. It's always interesting to try and come up with reasons for seemingly intuitive decisions.