Penname: Grownupron [Contact] Real name: Joe Goodwin
Member Since: 04/16/2006
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Very Bad Things by mapleandmahogany Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 48]
Summary: Ron and Hermione survive the war but suffer their worst attack on their final mission with Harry.
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Erotica, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Angst, Graphic Violence, Het, Hurt/Comfort, Non-Con, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 22581 Read Count: 9016
[Report This] Published: 04/28/2006 Updated: 05/29/2006
Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 05/15/2006 Title: Chapter 4: Reluctant Night

Honestly I think Hermione has the right idea. Somethings just cannot got unanswered.

Author's Response: I agree with you! Thank you for reading!

Hesitation by modestyrabnott Rated: MT - Mature Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 119]
Summary: If one hesitates in his path, let him not proceed. Let him respect his doubts, for doubts, too, may have some divinity in them. - Henry David Thoreau

For years, I waited, wondered and wished for the day when he'd finally set things in motion.
Categories: Remains of the Day > Eternity
Characters: Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley
Genres: Fluff, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: OC
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 42512 Read Count: 27013
[Report This] Published: 07/30/2006 Updated: 02/18/2007
Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 11/30/2006 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very, very well done.

Fate of the Generations by BrandedFaithfully Rated: FG13 - Family Guidance13 starstarstarstar [Reviews - 125]
Summary: Past Featured StoryIn the summer after sixth year, Harry is faced with many decisions; how to proceed with the horcrux hunt, how to keep his friends safe and what to do about his ever changing feelings towards a certain red-haired girl. What if this 'power the Dark Lord knows not' was in him all the time, but was being repressed? And could Ron's first Order mission bring back the answers that could unlock this power, forcing all of them to relive an ancient story and break the curse that became the fate of the generations.
Categories: Hallowed Halls > Golden Trio
Characters: Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley
Genres: Action/Adventure, Mystery, Romance, Trio
Time Period: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 33 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 164021 Read Count: 39799
[Report This] Published: 03/28/2007 Updated: 12/03/2008
Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 04/28/2008 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One A New Spy Is Born

 

 

Wow Ron is such a doormat.

 



Author's Response:

Dear Grownupron, Assuming you are actually on Chapter 1, I'll let you continue and see if you think he's the same when you get to Chapter 26!  Thanks so much for the review!

Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 04/28/2008 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - A Second Try

Err sorry I was on this chapter when I first review.

 

The story reads well and I'm normally a big R/Hr shipper but in this case I still think he's putting up with way too much Draco garabge and would be better off being a good dad and finding a less annoying and drama filled love interest.

 

He's still too much of a doormat.  

Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 11/21/2013 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 - Unspoken Desire

This si the chapter where it becomes crystal clear that hermione has been emotionally abusing Ron for nearly the entire story. She cannot be so stupid to see the games that Draco is playing and even if she is trying to get him over to the "good" side her tactics are so disgustingly cruel to Ron that the idea of Ron and Hermione ending up together sickens me. How self loathing would a man have to be to accept use treatment?

Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 11/21/2013 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - A Second Try

Hermione protestations ring a little hollow but we'll see if she means it; if she does she'll stay away from Draco if she doesn't she's the lying sack I think she's been the whole time.

Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 11/21/2013 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 - Faulty Floo

Yep, I knew Hermione wasn't going to stay away from Draco. Women like Hermione are the reasons a lot of men don't trust women.

Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 11/21/2013 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 - Moment of Truth

And now Draco is in her bed "being a friend". Will Ron just take any level of abuse?

Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 11/21/2013 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33 - A Curse is a Curse, Of Course, Of Course

Now Draco is at the birth of the baby. Ron really will take any level of disrespect. Ron you'd be beeter off hanging yourself.

Seven Days by xNymphadoraX Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 9]
Summary: Over the course of seven days Ginny's relationship with Draco unexpectedly goes from platonic to something more...
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Hermione Granger, Luna Lovegood, Ron Weasley
Genres: Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Contains Spoiler for HBP, Masturbation, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4549 Read Count: 1380
[Report This] Published: 04/17/2007 Updated: 09/28/2009
Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 09/28/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Benevolence

Wow Ginny seems to not have held the almost murdering her brother against him, oh and his letting in the werewolf that savaged her other brother either.

Ginny is not going to get invited to Christmas thats for sure.



Author's Response: Christmas invitations aside, at this point in her life, Ginny sees something in Draco that's worth reaching out to. His grievous mistakes are the source of immense grief and regret for him. My Ginny is a nurturer; the type of person who realizes that the war is over and even someone like Draco Malfoy deserves the chance to move forward. This story is about healing and repenting, something Draco is unable to do until he connects with Ginny. Inevitably, they do that for each other. Thanks for your comments.


Shards of Glass by 108 Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 39]
Summary: Lily's tidy secret explodes and she desperately needs Sirius and Remus to help James understand. But James has to want to understand. In order to do that, he'll have to reveal his own secrets - to his friends, and to himself.

And what is going on with Remus?

Thank you, thank you, marvelous beta Abigail!
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: James Potter, Lily Evans Potter, Remus Lupin, Sirius Black
Genres: Angst, Drama, Erotica
Time Period: Voldemort's First War
Warnings: Angst, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 43013 Read Count: 8024
[Report This] Published: 09/04/2007 Updated: 08/10/2009
Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 01/19/2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - And You

This is a very well written and compelling story.

That said the author is beyond a doubt female because what Sirus did has no defense or forgivness between men. The first time he violated the code of trust between mates James would have and should have cast him aside. The second time James should have killed him.

Thier reconcilliation is a conversation between two women.

I do love this story, I just thought it bears mentioning.



Author's Response:

Hi Grownupron!

 

First, let me apologize for deleting your first review. I was a newbie, and thought I was deleting my response to rewrite it. Ugh.

 

That said, I really like the point you're raising. First, you're right, I am a woman, and I'm sure that colors the action and interaction of the characters. But I'm curious - I know men who have worked through tough issues, even tougher than this, and remained friends. Granted, it has taken a much longer time than I have portrayed in this story, but for the sake of moving the story along, I'm condensing the timeline. I think you're right about initial reactions - James would have killed their friendship for a long, long time. But, if there is true friendship between him and Sirius, it couldn't have just ended forever. Especially not with Remus in the middle and Sirius feeling such remorse. If any two humans are interested in looking deeper into what is really going on for them, and, in this story, both James and Sirius are (albeit at different times), then there must come a time when that initial strong, totally justified reaction comes under question. Otherwise we would just go through life cutting people out and moving on. (And yes, I know there are people who do just that.) So this story is more of an exploration of what lies underneath our actions - the bits of us that we don't want to look at so much, the bits that make us look "bad," and a look at what happens if we try, in whatever fashion, to take responsibility for them. 

 

So is it realistic between two men? Not on the timeline I've portrayed, for sure. Point well taken. But is it realistic in life? Hmmm . . . I guess I can only say I hope so!

 

Thanks again for your consideration. I think it's important. And I'm glad you love the story and have stuck with it! I'd love to hear more about what you're talking about, though - please feel free to post more! It's something I'd like to bring to future stories.

 

Cheers!

 

Theresa

Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 01/19/2009 Title: Chapter 1: 1. Sunshine Charms

I just came back to amend my original review and saw you had responded so I can do both.

I don't think James should kill Sirius.I also agree that men often work through some pretty tough things but James and Sirius have a more problematic relationship.

 Firstly Sirius has betrayed James twice with years in between times. Yes Sirius had an "excuse" the first time but Sirius is very charismatic and wouldn't need Lilly to be the one to do it. So James can never again be secure and trustful in either relationship "fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me"

Making it even worse is that the two of the are essentaly soldiers in the same unit who need to be able to trust each other with their lives but now James knows he cannot trust Sirius at all.

I'd also like to say I love that James hasn't gone grovelling back to Lilly, that relationship is even more damaged than the one with Sirius. Many fanfic authors write a character doing something utterly reprehensible like Lilly has(twice) and has the other party come crawling back to them for some odd reason.

I have a feeling Voldemort is going to kill them and there will be no reconcilliation but thats just a guess.



Author's Response:

It’s very interesting the weight you put on that first betrayal. To me, as a writer who lives in her head, the intellectual “explanation” for the event was sufficient. Lily could have told someone else how to do it, but Sirius, being under the force of the curse, made her take the Vow not to tell anyone else what was going on. Do you hold the first time on par with the second time, even given the mitigating circumstances of the first one?

Yes . . . “soldiers in the same unit.” I was once involved (before, during, and after) with a man who was in the first Gulf war, and I know he said once that when he was in that position, the “extra bullshit” didn’t matter – what mattered was what was down deep. Like someone could be an asshole in “down time” but be totally reliable in a tense situation. Obviously, he was not talking about someone who had slept with his wife.

Yes, I didn’t think it would be even remotely realistic or honest to have James grovel back to Lily. He is not the one who caused the breech. It is entirely incumbent upon her to be open to him, to soften. However (and I’m sure I’ll hear from you again on this one hee hee), he does have to take responsibility for what he has sown in terms of his own refusal to truly open up to Lily about what his life is like right now.

Again, with the man I dated, he didn’t talk about what was going on for him in that situation. In fact, he almost never brought it up. But it changed who he was in fundamental ways, and he was never the “same” after he came back. This is not his fault – I think experiences like that must fundamentally change you or you go insane. However, he had no context from which to explore how and why he had been so strongly impacted.

If he had been a bit more open, if he had been able to talk about what was true for him, I wonder if his life – and our relationship – would have gone differently? I did try – but there was never quite an opening for him. I’ve given James the opening this other man never had, and given him a will to look at it, a desire to try to see how much he is holding inside. Don’t ever say fiction isn’t based somewhat on life.

It would be a relief to just let Voldemort handle the whole bloody thing! Alas, my intent is to cause all this strife and then, somehow, bring it back to where it was prior to the actual events as Rowling wrote them . . . with a few shadows, not in her work, remaining. I’d love to see how the whole arc rests with you along the way as well as at the end. Also, how this posting hits you.

Cheers -

Theresa

This is very long! Hope you’re still with me.

Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 01/23/2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - Redux

Very compeling.

Its still hard to adapt to a Sirius lacking his basic loyalty. I have to say its nice to all four have flaws though. I think even Remus is flawed in that he tries so hard to be fair and even handed that he equates all of their behaviors. James has made a couple of emotional mistakes but on the Karmic scale Lily and Sirius have gone way beyong that.

 It also adds to an interesting bit of cannon. Why who was secret keeper was changed. James is running out of people he can trust.

I know how cannon ends but I have to say I'd like to see James walk away. Not leave his son obviously but maintain some self respect. He should do something nice for Lupin though.



Author's Response:

I know - it's tough for me to mess with Sirius's loyalty, as well. Hopefully I've given enough context of the hell they're living in to show that it isn't that he wants Lily - it's that he's shattered inside and he doesn't know where - or how - to go to be healed. He's just flailing.

And yes, I always wondered why the secret keeper was changed, too! I like my reason better. Honestly, would you pick Peter if you didn't *have* to??

It's tempting to let James walk . . . . very tempting.

Thanks for sticking with the story and for reviewing! It helps to have contact with actual readers. :)

Cheers -

Theresa

Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 02/18/2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - Redux

Hmm I think I must have missed something.

Author's Response:

*smacks head* No, I just should have made the next chapter part of this one. Sorry.

Reviewer: Grownupron Signed
Date: 08/10/2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - Recompense. For All My Crimes of Self-Defense

Interesting, but theres a good bit of creepiness implied in what Meliae seems to eb planning.

Author's Response:

Hi Grownupron!

Meliae can be creepy, there's no doubt about that, but there's so much Meliae is doing here . . . can you be more specific?  Do you mean with Lily, with Peter, or with the wine?

Keep in mind, though, that she has no will of her own - she's completely a slave to the cloth and what's woven. She can't change anything that's going to happen. And the pain of it is, she knows exactly what's going to happen to all of them. She knows it, and she can't do anything about it, and it's killing her. All she can do is guide what they do toward what needs to be heavy and what needs to be light. 

But let me know what you mean - I'm curious now. :)

 Thanks for the review!

Theresa