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P is for Persuasion by luciology Rated: RT - Restricted Themes [Reviews - 1]
Summary: Even the gentlest soul can turn when provoked once too often. Merryweather, Harry's homophobic boss, thinks he's finally got the upper hand where Draco's concerned. Enter one extremely pissed off Harry Potter.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Harry Potter
Genres: Drama
Time Period: None
Warnings: Angst, Graphic Violence, Hurt/Comfort, Slash, Strong Language
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5445 Read Count: 609
[Report This] Published: 09/14/2006 Updated: 09/14/2006
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 08/25/2009 Title: Chapter 1: P is for Persuasion

Sweet and captivating.  Thank you Luciology!!

Author's Response: Thanks very much. This is one of my faves.

A Kiss For Thanks by mapleandmahogany Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 13]
Summary: Past Featured StoryExcerpt:  “Just give us a kiss and call it even,” Ron said quietly.

“What’s that?” Harry asked, his eyes gone wide.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room
Characters: Harry Potter, Ron Weasley
Genres: Erotica, Fluff, PWP, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Minor Fluff, Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2212 Read Count: 3788
[Report This] Published: 10/26/2006 Updated: 10/27/2006
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 05/12/2009 Title: Chapter 1: A Kiss For Thanks

That was both so very tender and so very hot.  My eyes started watering because I didn't want to miss a moment, and then kept tearing with the sweet emotions of it all.  Thank you so much for a wonderful fic.

Fever In My Blood by simons_flower Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]
Summary: Magic has ways of working around denial.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room
Characters: Harry Potter, Ron Weasley
Genres: Drama, Erotica
Time Period: None
Warnings: Angst, BDSM, D/S, Masturbation, RST, Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Voyeurism
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3108 Read Count: 1690
[Report This] Published: 11/01/2006 Updated: 11/01/2006
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 04/08/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Fever In My Blood

One comment: If he could do a 'point me' spell to a dark, private place, why couldn't they do the same for their portkey location or for London, or etc. etc. etc.???  Still, bloody hot!  So thanks!

Author's Response: Well, even if they could have found their Apparition point or London, they'd have to walk there or use Muggle means to get there, not Apparate there. And it was part of the prompt, so I had to make it work :) Glad you liked it!

Sometimes They Burn by Emma Grant Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Past Featured StoryAfter the War, Harry Potter makes Draco Malfoy an offer he can't refuse – and Draco discovers that his own demons are very real.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Dungeon
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Harry Potter
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama
Time Period: None
Warnings: BDSM, Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Violence
Series: Demelza House Fundraiser
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 17218 Read Count: 5017
[Report This] Published: 11/08/2006 Updated: 11/08/2006
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 08/25/2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Oh wonderful.  A breath of fresh air, I could almost taste it.  I love how you took the spell, and made it have weight and consequence, took a philosophical concept and turned it into one hell of a plot device.  Well done.  I loved it.  Thank you so much for the amazing fic.

You Say It's Your Birthday by Emma Grant Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]
Summary: Harry gets very drunk on his 30th birthday, so drunk that he has no idea what happened that night -- except that it somehow involved Draco Malfoy.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Harry Potter
Genres: Comedy, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3879 Read Count: 1440
[Report This] Published: 01/04/2007 Updated: 01/04/2007
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 09/16/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oooh!  Wonderful!  I want more!!!

Eight Days in November by Emma Grant Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstar [Reviews - 3]
Summary: A lot can happen in eight days.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Harry Potter
Genres: Action/Adventure
Time Period: None
Warnings: Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 8420 Read Count: 2087
[Report This] Published: 01/04/2007 Updated: 01/04/2007
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 03/25/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Well, I really really like it, I just feel like it makes a fabulous first chapter of a longer fic! (-:  Still, great writing, and look forward to reading more of your work!!

Thank you!!!

The (Happy) Half-Blood Prince by Amanuensis Rated: MT - Mature Themes [Reviews - 2]
Summary: A heart made of lead, and a Swallow longing for lotus-flowers, and no Mystery so great as Misery.
Categories: Remains of the Day > Leaving Feast
Characters: Harry Potter, Augustus Rookwood
Genres: Drama
Time Period: None
Warnings: Hurt/Comfort
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 12127 Read Count: 320
[Report This] Published: 03/08/2007 Updated: 03/08/2007
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 09/19/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh that was quite nice, and quite different.  Your characterizations are as adept and dynamic as always.  Naturally, I only wish I was able to see the real flowering of their relationship... but I thoroughly enjoyed what you gave us!  Thank you for a lovely tale.

Long Time Coming by charlottesometimes Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Harry/Draco: The war is over and much of the Hogwarts staff has died or retired. Harry and Draco work about as well together as professors as they ever did as students.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Harry Potter
Genres: PWP
Time Period: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4987 Read Count: 492
[Report This] Published: 03/26/2007 Updated: 03/26/2007
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 03/27/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Long Time Coming

That was really quite lovely and hot.  I'm impressed that you managed to get so much characterization in in such a short space, but every little detail fit and expanded on the context.  Really a great piece of storytelling.  And, of course, the sex was amazing.  I also really liked that you developed their characters (certainly Harry's understanding of Draco and how they relate to each other) yet in a believable way for the time allotted.  Thank you for the wonderful fic!!!

Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 06/24/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Long Time Coming

My eyes are watering from being so enthralled with your tale; I didn't want to take the time to blink!  Your depiction of them both is so endearing, and Draco's 'methods' of attracting Harry are so believable and entertaining!  Thank you for a wonderful tale.

Standing Alone by charlottesometimes Rated: FG - Family Guidance starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Past Featured StoryHarry/Draco: Sometimes comfort comes from unexpected places.
Categories: Remains of the Day > Leaving Feast
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Harry Potter
Genres: PWP
Time Period: None
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 874 Read Count: 936
[Report This] Published: 03/26/2007 Updated: 03/26/2007
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 05/12/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Standing Alone

"A LITTLE gay"???  (-:  There's an understatement of epic proportions.  Sensitive and gorgeous, your Draco pops right off the screen.  I feel like I've read a whole tale in these few hundred words, and still want many more!  Thank you for yet another of your lovely fics!!

Faded Glamour by charlottesometimes Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]
Summary: Snape/Draco (Lucius/Draco implied): An ugly truth about Draco's past is revealed when Severus finds Draco strung out on potions in Diagon Alley.
Categories: Dark Tales > Going Under
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Lucius Malfoy, Augustus Rookwood
Genres: Darkfic
Time Period: None
Warnings: Graphic Violence, Incest
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6425 Read Count: 692
[Report This] Published: 03/26/2007 Updated: 03/26/2007
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 06/24/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Faded Glamour

I was browsing your tales, and noticed that this one had not been commented upon.  A failure of your readers, as it is a beautiful fic.  Mesmerizing, and skillfully written.  I've loved all your fics, and am impressed by the range of emotion you brought through here.  The ending, in particular, I felt was perfect: not closure, not exactly, but finished.  For a story of edges and wrongness, it is perfect.  Thank you for the tale.

How Close the Divide by Thevina Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]
Summary: Healers can be their own worst enemies— Ron is, but Draco steps up to the challenge. On top of that, despite their bond, when it comes to family, Ron can't leave well enough alone. Has he pushed things too far with Draco and Xavier? The sixth full-length installment in the Magic Immunity series.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ron Weasley
Genres: Drama, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Rimming, Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content
Series: Magic Immunity
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 18401 Read Count: 761
[Report This] Published: 04/02/2007 Updated: 04/02/2007
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 04/13/2009 Title: Chapter 1: How Close the Divide

Brace yourself.  I realized as I started reading that this was going to be one of those fics that I needed to keep a running commentary on for review.  So think of yourself as a director of sorts, and you can follow along as I 'watch' your 'film'.  Well... some parts I got a bit too distracted to leave proper comments.  Comes with the territory of painfully good writing.  

 

"Ron tried to rationalize it; a pinched nerve, or the fact that no matter what Draco said, their bed was lumpy."

This sentence made me realize what I find so oddly magical about your fics: they strike me as more vividly real than most stories set in the real world.  The emotions and the people are so incredibly alive, I find it hard to separate them out.  It's like therapy, watching other, complex individuals scrabble through their lives and troubles.

I also just realized why I feel such connection and yet exasperation with Ron: he is my beloved father, incarnate in HP-fandom.  If this disturbs you slightly, I'll apologize now.  But the inexplicable tenderness and caring, highly frustrating communication skills yet honest affection, coupled with a deep insecurity most aggravating to those who love him, just made me realize that I was talking to Ron like I'd talk to my Dad, when he's having, well, some difficulty sorting things out .  Then there's his well-honed skill at denial that irritates himself, subsequently making him irritable with everyone else.  Fascinating.

Of course, that would make Draco my mother.  Which also fits on far too many levels.  Oh my.

"he was a Healer, yet he'd resolutely not sought out someone else to confirm what Ron believed to be true."

You must have had personal dealings with doctors.


Reeter Skeeter's Bloody Living?!?!  You nearly made me spit out my wine.  That was not nice.  (Speaking of which, if you ever want a laugh, look up the magazine "Is Martha Stewart Living"... it's an absolutely hilarious spoof that was around about ten years back.  May still be floating about, not sure.)


This was the best relationship he'd ever had, and he'd betrayed both Draco and himself by allowing fear to rule him.
"Just don't fucking go where I can't follow, dammit!"

Isn't this interesting?  Both of them are really still centrally concerned with being left, abandoned by the other.  Ron's phrasing is actually what really bothered me: "WAS the best relationship".  He's still to some extent convinced of his worthlessness, prepared to give up as soon as he makes a mistake.  Or, perhaps more correctly, he's prepared to believe that Draco will give up as soon as Ron makes a mistake.  It's pervasive... his actions, his thoughts, his words.  Somehow I think you see this, see how corrosive his self-doubt is.  Just a few key words, and you've taken something that could have been a dry narration and given the reader an insight into the psychological state of the character, without the reader even needing to be aware of it.  Oh, very, very well done.


'Every magical person has their own unique ambric pattern—"

'"I know that," Draco interrupted. "How is he going to—"

'"Draco. Let me finish," Ron said peevishly. "You asked. I'm answering." He took some of the sting out of his commentary by sliding his hand under Draco's. '

Yeah, it's confirmed.  You've created my parents, slash, in H/D form.  I think I've seen that argument in so many permutations that it doesn't matter if it's talking about ambric patterns or door handles.  Impatient, much, Draco?  Your insight into relationships is leaking through again here, my dear Thevina.


"I know I was in a fucking bad place before, and you didn't leave. In fact, you marked yourself for me."

There.  That's what I was waiting for.  It's so hard to prove to the other person that you mean it when you say you're committed.  That something's as permanent as life.  Ron never got it.  I think he's getting it now.  Thank the gods for Draco, on this one.  Oh this made me SO happy to read.  This one line.  I'll control my semi-stationary glee-induced bouncing.

"planting small seeds of doubt of their long-term compatibility, despite being handfasted"

"I'm fucking BOUND to you, though right now when you're bring a total prick, I really wonder why"

Ack!  No!!  I just read the Sauna Incident.  Oh that HURT.  I think Remus said something at the handfasting about being caring and patient with each other?  Even DRACO is being a right arse.  Calling the relationship into doubt is just off limits.  Oh my oh my oh my oh my...

"maybe he wasn't meant for a long-term thing with anybody. Standing inside the lift, gazing at his despondent face through the mirrored sheen of Malfoysian crests, he realised that was rubbish. He'd made a commitment to Draco, and he'd meant it. "

Well that was a relieving moment.  I honestly am impressed to see that you can reincorporate that paralysing doubt, and yet use it as part of what Ron needs to feel in order for him to see that, no, this is something he's going to work through.  Damned hard choice.


""I didn't think you would." Draco placed a hand on Ron's bicep, his hand gently squeezing in a brotherly manner. "I could be really off the mark, but I think you've told me things you've never told another living soul. That's trust in me, Ron, and belief that I'm going to stick around. You're committed to me, and I know that. But sometimes you doubt yourself, and that's rather painful to watch, even though it happens a lot.""

"Draco's insight floored Ron. Draco almost never talked like this, then again, neither did he. They just didn't need to talk relationship stuff like a couple of women, but Draco was spot on in what he'd said."

Yeah, well, your insight floors me.  Repeatedly.


"Through it, though, they made things work, and most of their glassware hadn't suffered Ron's wrath."

This is the kind of optimism that makes life worth living, right? As long as most of the glassware is still intact.  (-;


So, with all that, the more general comments: I was a bit surprised that Ron's treatment wasn't more involved.  Perhaps it just wasn't where you were wanting to go, but I actually would have thought that it would have become a more pervasive element of life (the only time it really shows up strongly is with summoning lube!).  As it is, though, I did feel that the medical scene with both the other Healer and Raven was wonderful (Well, meeting the oter Healer wasn't exactly wonderful per se.  If that's your conception of het, I can see why you stick to writing slash.  He's a real ass.  Kudos, though, for writing such a thoroughly believable one).  I felt like you introduced Raven with aplomb, and he just lifted right off the screen. 

One comment about Draco, though: given his preoccupation with appearances (not unduly so, but still), I was a bit surprised that he would have been willing to squabble in any way while in front of a stranger, and certainly not while playing host to that stranger in his home.  I also am curious what happened to "ghost Harry".  Has he disappeared?  Also regarding Xavier, or perhaps more for parenting in general here: there's really no discussion about where Draco's parenting style comes from.  Is he learning from Lucius?  His mother?  What is his focus?  He seems to have some hang-ups about 'moderation' given his concerns about Xavier obsessing, but combined with his apparent willingness for the child to be whoever he wants, it could use some clarification.  Draco here is so dynamic, and your previous depictions of him so endeared me to him, that I'm curious to get a deeper sense of where his behavior is coming from.

I love how you don't even need the outrageous to bring depth into your characters' lives here.  Snapping gingers were enough to remind Ron of his lover's amazing empathy and caring.  It's just hard to focus on the wealth of significance in the little things sometimes.  So thank you for bringing them back in perspective.  Need to go remind my parents I love them, now.

Now and Then by oldenuf2nobetter Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 54]
Summary: Even the death of Voldemort did not end the struggle between good and evil. And even the discovery of a new and unexpected power cannot save Harry from having to deal, once and for all, with an old nemesis.
Categories: The Broomshed > Dark Side
Characters: Vincent Crabbe, Seamus Finnigan, Gregory Goyle, Hermione Granger, Draco Malfoy, Harry Potter, Ginny Weasley, Ron Weasley
Genres: Darkfic
Time Period: None
Warnings: Angst, BDSM, Bondage, Drug Usage, Dub-Con, Graphic Violence, Het, Hurt/Comfort, Non-Con, Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Threesome
Series: None
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 46660 Read Count: 16200
[Report This] Published: 04/13/2007 Updated: 06/26/2007
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 06/11/2009 Title: Chapter 14: Now and Then: Chapter 14

I'd been saving up time to read this fic, as I know from reading your others that I get completely absorbed.  Your gift for detail, your finesse with presenting characters and moving plot, is unparalleled, and absolutely captivating.  And I'd say that this was one of your very best.  I'm in awe of what you do, and can't thank you enough for the gift of sharing it.  I am particularly impressed by your empathy for every character.  You understand them all.  Seamlessly you move from one mind to another, and I was overwhelmed by how enmeshed I became in the tale.  And somehow, with all of that, you manage to inject some wonderful wit that is all your own.  Thank you.  Thank you so much.

Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 06/11/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Now and Then: Chapter 1

And i was just reading through some of the other reviews, and I can't believe this was your first fic!!!  You amaze me ever more.  Also, on a more specific level, I was very impressed by the depth of emotion you were able to create with the 'trio' relationship.  You didn't try to make it anything else other than what it was.  And it was believable in its very singularity.  Hot too.  You do a very good job of creating both.

Lust Potion #9 by Samayel Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Draco is the victim of his own scheming mind, and his own frail heart. A potion mishap leads to the ultimate wake-up call!
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Harry Potter
Genres: Comedy, Erotica, General, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Dub-Con, Love/Hate, Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4814 Read Count: 1793
[Report This] Published: 04/13/2007 Updated: 04/14/2007
Reviewer: Aethonan Signed
Date: 02/27/2010 Title: Chapter 1: Lust Potion #9

Wonderful!  Yes the twist was perfect, and it explained so much.  Made me smile at the end, which you always seem able to do.  Thank you so much Samayel.