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Cannons 'Til I Die by thesteppyone Rated: GP - General Public starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 0]
Summary: Past Featured StoryRon takes Hugo to his first Cannons match.
Categories: Remains of the Day > Eternity
Characters: Hermione Granger, Hugo Weasley, Ron Weasley
Genres: Comedy
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: None
Series: Step's Helmet Fest 2008 Submissions!
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4099 Read Count: 3039
[Report This] Published: 04/04/2008 Updated: 04/04/2008
Reviewer: sari_malfoy Signed
Date: 07/20/2008 Title: Chapter 1: Cannons 'Til I Die

Hey.  I just had to drop a line about a little (funny, in a nice way) mistake in the story. "Ron, remembering he was trying to teach his son not to eat with his mouth full". Right after it you talk about not talking with his mouth full, though. Just thought I'd point that out.

 
(Of course, for the sake of argument, it is somewhat possible to want to teach a kid to not eat with his mouth full, as in wanting him to eat in a civil way without stuffing his mouth to the brim.)

A nice story, too :))