Date: 10/11/2010 06:46 AM Title: Chapter 1
This was a stitch to read! Your Millie was intriguing. I like that she wasn't heinously ugly, or stupid; and that Charlie found her pretty. The image of Lyle chasing her about the camp was great!
Some things were written more crudely than I'm usually comfortable with; but, they worked because of the way you had set up the characters and were clearly necessary to show growth. Specifically, Millie's approach to sex. I'm glad Charlie was there to take it back a step and approach her as a woman, not just a sex partner. Nice work!