Date: 10/03/2009 06:34 AM Title: Chapter 1
This was good, very hot.
It took me a while to get into the rhythm of the story though. The mention of the time with Hermione made it feel like a sequel, but with only the most tenuous of connection between them. It might have worked better with Hermione instead of Pansy, especially since it would have given Hermione the opportunitly to fully explore her fascination with them and the thrill of the tabboo.
However, Ron/Pansy is my second favorite ship, so I really liked it from that point. With it written the way it is, I think it could have benefitted from a little more exposition by Pansy at the beginning. Her thinking about her history with Ron, if she knew about the two of them with Hermione, and her talking about her own attraction to the siblings having sex other than, "it's not uncommon among Purebloods."
Again, good story and I look forward to seeing what you do with these characters in the future.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! You're right, this is a sequel, of sorts, to the story "The Best of Friends" which is Ron/Hermione/Ginny, in which Hr does expore her fascination with them and the taboo. I agree that the story's rhythm is a bit akward. This, and "Best of Friends" were originally a role play, and I tried to make them "flow" more as a story. And yeah for Ron/Pansy! :)
Date: 09/19/2009 08:57 AM Title: Chapter 1
this was very good, I was so hoping you would do another just as good as the first...and i think you did.....very good (stands up and claps) very good!!! hats off to you.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! *takes a bow* So glad you enjoy our stories. :)