Date: 08/15/2009 12:07 AM Title: Chapter 1
I just had to see how this pair could be pulled off. You did it! Really well written, and my eyes are watering from not wanting to miss a moment or slow down reading. M only critique would be that Severus's refusals early on in the story aren't explained... just that 'it wouldn't work'. What is his reasoning here? That Ron is too good for him? I would expect more snipy remarks from him then, about his 'American boyfriend' or some such. Still, I thoroughly enjoyed the tale, found it very, very hot, and look forward to reading more of yours! Thanks for the wonderful fic.
Author's Response: Thanks so much - yes it's hard to keep Sev' verbage as crisp as it always needs to be. It was a first attempt and I hope to do better with the next one.
Date: 08/10/2009 10:50 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is really, really good ... except that YOU KILLED HARRY! (I know you already knew how I felt about that, but I just had to say it again).
You did an excellent job with the anxiously awaited sex scene, while at the same time supplying us with a believable plot and loads of angst.
But next time, don't kill Harry if you need him out of the way. Just give him to me and I'll keep him occupied for you.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it - but that was a given - LOL
Date: 08/10/2009 09:50 AM Title: Chapter 1
'Pants...Off... NOW!' Might be my favourite line in that. Good old lust-broken vocabulary, eh? *grin*
This is so lovely and heartfelt. Severus is stronger than I could ever be -confronted with a soggy Ron Weasley wrapped in nought but a towel, don't think I could have stopped.
Your setting of the tension between them was perfect. Not too long, not too soon, but just perfect.
Author's Response: Yes - there is another R/S story, but it's not a continuation of this one. There just aren't enough R/S stories so I'm trying to fill the void - LOL Thanks again