Date: 08/12/2007 01:16 AM Title: One Shot
Your writing style is very good. You let me, the reader, work my mind while reading it - there is lots of room for me to think about what is going on and draw my own conclusions. I reviewed your story The Lost Generation and mentioned a bit of a problem with not giving the reader quite enough information to draw the conclusions you clearly want drawn (in this one, for instance, there is not a clear enough path to determine Cedric's motives - brotherly? romantically interested?). You are particularly good at the whole "show don't tell" thing, which can be challenging for writers. Have you been trained to be a writer or are you one of those people who seem to come by it naturally? I'd be interested in hearing about how you learned to write the way you do.
This is going to be very annoying, but yet again I have to say that the lack of clarity about Cedric's motives is entirely intentional. In the main I wanted him to seem simply friendly and decent, but I did also want to leave the possibility of romance (in five, or ten years time, say) just...out of reach, sort of floating there in the narrative. Not that Cedric is actually thinking of it, or behaving the way he does for that reason, but I did want the reader to think, 'when Ginny's a little older, maybe...' It gives (hopefully) the story a sort of extra dash of poignance, if you see it in that light - but it isn't essential.
As for my 'training' as a writer, I don't really know what to tell you. I don't tend to believe in the sort of natural talent that flowers forth fully bloomed - I had to learn how to work out a story. The single biggest lesson I've learned from fanfic (and I do look on fanfic as 'training' of a kind) is not to get in my own way. I hate having to come out and say things like 'Ginny doesn't like Dementors because of her traumatic experiences with a sociopath, etc,' because ideally the writing should get you there anyway - you shouldn't have to tell (of course, there'll always be times when you will, just for the sake of brevity). The moment you tell the reader the Very Important Fact (whatever it may be) you shut off all other interpretations, and...well, it's really rather boring.