Date: 04/30/2009 08:55 PM Title: A Walk in the World
Amazing. Stunning. Incredible. And with illos, yet!
I'm really impressed with your portrait of Seamus as he grows up and out of the war that's kept him a child a little too long. You voice him beautifully and keep him true so to himself the portrayal rings like good crystal. I felt his confusion and eventually his pain, and was very impressed at the clarity you gave him to heal himself.
One of your other reviewers suggested a companion piece from Dean's POV. If I were in your place (which, of course, I'm not) I wouldn't do it. Dean needs to be the mysterious one, the silent one, the almost-unreachable goal. Every love story needs a moment where the loved one seems unobtainable: you've stretched that moment to bind the whole fic together. Don't voice him. He should never lose his mystery.
Or his sense of humor. "There better be flowers." It would be a good title for the fic, actually.
Overall, it reminds me of a song I heard on the radio today: "It's a love story, baby, just say yes." Once they're able to say yes to one another, Dean and Seamus have all they need.
Thank you for your kind words, I'm very glad that you liked the story and took the time for letting me know what you thought. And no, I'm not planning to write a companion piece or a sequel for several reasons. This story has been told and is definitely finished.
Your suggestion for a title is interesting. There is one reason, though, why it wouldn't work for me. The story isn't a humorous piece, and even though I've included some banter and lighter moments, the core of the story is a journey - literally and figuratively. That's why I chose a title that expresses that. Thank you for making me think about it, though. It's always interesting to try and come up with reasons for seemingly intuitive decisions.
Date: 04/25/2009 09:04 PM Title: A Walk in the World
This story is so freaking amazing that it left me in a ball of goo devoid of all speech capability. I have read it 4 times through and it's taken me a week to formulate even a modicum of coherency so that I could tell you just how much I love this. Your characterizations are absolutely spot on-- I adored both Seamus and Dean. It ended perfectly, but left me desperately wanting more. The integration of the postcards into the text was impressive and a great addition. I especially love Seamus's at the end. I wish I knew what was going through Dean's mind during all of this-- especially the last few sections, i.e. Seamus choking Alfonso til the end! Would you consider a companion piece w/ Dean's POV? Anyway. Just had to tell you how much I absolutely 100% LOVE and adore this fic. One of the best fics I've read without question. I really hope you write more, because this was stunning!
Author's Response: Thank you for your comment. I'm very glad that you liked the story, especially that the characterizations work for you. There'll be no companion piece from Dean's POV, though. The story has been told and I feel that it's finished.
Date: 04/20/2009 09:46 AM Title: A Walk in the World
What a great tale of coming to know yourself. I like the way you let the readers see that Seamus and Dean love eachother before you let Seamus see it. And I like Seamus' mother very much. She comes across as a very accepting woman.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your comment. I'm glad that you like it. And yes, Seamus's mother is accepting. She hasn't always been, but it's never too late to learn :)