Date: 11/11/2008 07:56 AM Title: Chapter 1
I thought the story quite good; I think quibbling about scholastic systems is missing the idea of a review; the idea is that Fred reacted normally, and did make an adjustment, and did survive in both worlds.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to read and review this story. I'm glad that you liked Fred's reactions. I'm only recently writing more gen pieces, so this review means quite a bit to me.
Date: 09/22/2008 12:55 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is a great story! Throughout the seven books in canon, we were in told that muggleborns should be welcome in the magical world, and marry purebloods freely (though I believe Angelina is a half blood) and rightly so. However this is the flip side to the story.
I can't imagine what it'd be like for a child to be the only squib in a large magical family. It would lead to feelings of inadequacy and not quite belonging, that your family's love could only partly eradicate. A child's worst fear is being different, especially if this difference was seen as being inferior. Also, it seems that squibs are more likely to lose touch with their families, not suprising as they'd feel more equal and part of the Muggle world.
My only criticisim would be that he went from still hurting to relatively accepting too quickly - you should have done a few chapters! That said, he'd always feel 'different' and it's not only children who have trouble with that. Thanks for a thought provoking story. Nice that he seemed at ease with himself at the end - unlike poor Filch.
Thank you for taking the time to respond. I'm glad that you liked the story. Your criticism is correct. I wish I could have explored his character more. This was originally written for a challenge on Live Journal, and they wanted it to be around 1000 words. When I hit 5000, I knew that I wouldn't be able to go every place that I wanted to. I tried to give a snapshot of his life and how his family reacted. I had planned to do the same story from George's point of view because as you said the children aren't the only ones to have trouble with that. And, despite the fact, that I think George would be an outstanding father, we all have our disappointments when expectations are not met, whether intentionally or through nature, and I would liked to have explored George's view of everything as well as his feelings. I still may do that.
Thank you again for reading.
Date: 09/19/2008 05:51 AM Title: Chapter 1
fred would need to do a levls before he went to university
Author's Response: Thank you for reading, and thank you for the information. Someone else mentioned it as well. I was under the impression that the GCSE's took the place of the A-levels, but I will, of course, look it up, and correct it at some point in the near future. Thank you again.
Date: 09/19/2008 01:57 AM Title: Chapter 1
ummm....i like the story very much.
Only GCSE's are taken at 16 and then you have to do A-Levels or a Baccalauriate at 18 to get into University.
Thank you for the clarification on the GCSE's. I was under the impression that they were the last test taken before heading off the university. I will try to get into the story and make the corrections in the future.
Thank you for reading the story and commenting. I appreciate your time, and especially for the information.