Date: 08/25/2009 06:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
I like that you're exploring the H/D relationship from AFTER the 'get together' cliche. I would note that you don't really show how things happen, though, particularly in the 'flashbacks' (which, for clarity's sake, aren't actually flashbacks here; they're simply Draco reminiscing to provide context).
Also, I can't quite see Harry so simply rattling off the whole scene with Bill like an automaton... saying those cruel things to Draco's face without flinching. You don't think he might try and shield Draco a bit? Tell him the truth in a way that makes it clear he disagrees with it? Hmm...
Still, a good premise and generally well-written. Thanks for the fic!