Date: 02/20/2013 05:24 PM Title: One: Sincerely Yours
You are amazing. Seriously I love this story. This is my second time reading the series. Even though I have already read all Harry Potter books and love them. But reading this is like reading everything the first time.
Date: 10/27/2008 01:39 PM Title: Thirty-Two: Internal
I've loved Book Four as much as the earlier ones, and look forward to Book Five! I know I repeat myself often with this opinion, but I remain very impressed with the voice you give to Hermione. I think you really capture the emotions that young girls go through. The fact that you "sort of like" a boy, while perhaps "really liking" another is something we've all been through, and you do a great job of showing how conflicted Hermione must feel about that. Especially knowing that Ginny likes Harry so much. Bah, hormones keep us in a whirl for ages,...maternal, platonic, romantic...all those feelings just stirring around in each of us. You've done a good job with illustrating the internal conflict without dragging it into angst. Strong work.
Date: 10/25/2008 08:47 PM Title: Thirty-One: Neville's Story
Hmm, I have to say, in the matter of relaying bad news to someone, it is usually the case for the most pressing information to be uttered first, before going into details behind the event. Even though you are trying to keep the action in chronological, it doesn't particularly work in a journal format. If someone dies, you don't build it up a half hour before delivering the news. So, I don't think it would have been a bad thing for Neville to go over the list of injuries and deaths before Hermione would insist he begin at the beginning. She would want the whole story, anyway. I don't usually expect so much dialogue in a journal, either. People tend to sum up conversations when writing them down. But anyway, these criticisms don't mar the pleasure of the reading experience for me, but I'm wondering what drew you to this format with which to work in if you wanted to concentrate on those other aspects.
Date: 10/24/2008 04:22 PM Title: Thirty: The Department of Mysteries
This is pretty much a cumulative review, but I've read all of your other "Hermione's Journal" series (including your start on "PLans" over at TFT) and enjoyed all of them so far. Hermione is not always my favorite character in canon---I mean, I can understand why Harry argues so fiercely with her when they differ on opinions of great importance---but you've tempered her voice somewhat in her first person narrative while still giving us the bulk of the stories. It's not always an easy feat to make the exposition sound plausible, since much of the action that occurs is not always witnessed by her, and she is often relaying information via Harry. But you still manage to keep her style effortless and entertaining. It feels very much like a teenage girl pouring her heart out into the pages of her diary, but because it's Hermione, it doesn't become cloying or single-minded.
I'm curious about the ratings on these later editions, seeing as you've yet to stray from any of the canon details (other than Hermione's inner thoughts where you have free reign), but are you planning on deviating from the story structure once you get to DH? I get a heavy trio feeling coming up. And Hermione's hormones are starting to become more prevalent.
Date: 10/19/2008 08:17 PM Title: Twenty-Six: Brothers
It's getting good now, isn't it!? Thanks for the terrific update. I really liked Hermione admitting that it felt pretty nice being held safely in Harry's arms. I think we can all get a little crush when we're pulled into safety!
Date: 10/18/2008 12:41 PM Title: Twenty-Four: Banned
Thanks for another great update! I always love getting the insight that you offer as to what happened that we may not have noticed in the books.
You know something that has bothered me ever since JKR wrote it? Why did Hermione think she could free the house elves by leaving clothing about for them. Harry had to trick Lucius Malfoy into giving Dobby a sock in order to free him. Students don't own the elves, so they shouldn't be able to free them. Or is there something I'm missing there?
Anyway, great chapter, looking forward to more!
Date: 10/16/2008 05:37 PM Title: Twenty-Five: Temporary Headmistress
I've read all the diary series and absolutely love it! You really have an great idea of what Hermione is really like. I look forward to more. Have you ever considered doing something like this for ron?
Date: 10/13/2008 08:31 PM Title: Twenty-Four: Banned
Thanks for the updates! (It's been a bit busy lately, and I was three or four chapters behind!) I love Hermione's reactions to Luna. Luna makes me crazy. She's not bad, not mean, but just not my cup of tea! You're doing a fantastic job with this project!