Date: 08/12/2007 09:41 PM Title: Non Sequitur
I love this story. You are a very good writer. Your sense of comic timing is impeccable - the sequence after James says, "For what?" is just perfect. Also - "He got up and left." Funny and "oh no, you idiot," at the same time. An honest and totally boneheaded reaction and it rings absolutely true. How long have you been writing, and have you had any training, or do you just know what you're doing? Did you edit and reedit this piece a million times or is this pretty much how it came out the first time?