Date: 08/08/2008 02:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow. Wow. That's an awfully, ummmm....evocative? well described? detailed? lead up to a simple kiss. In fact, I'd say the preceding paragraphs turn it into something much more than a simple kiss. (I don't think that's easy to do. Congratulations!)
Date: 05/01/2006 11:47 AM Title: Chapter 1
That was SO wonderful! I love stories like this, they just instantly trasnport a person back to a "big" first kiss w/ an important boy or girl.